Hello, thar. Meinos Kaen here!
So, it seems that a prospective of some nookie won over the run-away route. Let's see where that leads us, shall we? First, a double warning.
Yes, the next scene is M-Rated.
*waits for the crowd to quiet down* Yeah. So, to keep this blog not adult rated, if you want to read that part, you'll have to either download or read the PDF online.
What follows is only the safe part of the snippet! Well, enjoy!
Seven Days Later
"So... Nothing?" Naruto sighed, shaking his head.
"Nothing, Tsunami-nee-san. It's like she disappeared in thin air." That brought a smile to her face, despite herself.
“... Like a ghost?” Naruto groaned, putting his head in his hands.
“At this point, she might as well be.” Naruto sighed. He had searched for the Haku sosia for seven days straight and found not a trace of her. “... I guess I have to face the fact that I'll probably never know the truth about her, and about how she's related to Haku.”
“... I'm sorry, Naruto.” Tsunami's joking mood came to a premature end as she realized just how distraught Naruto was for not finding out the truth. “Maybe if I had let you-”
“Nee-san, don't you think it's a bit too late for regrets, now?” Naruto said, staring at her with a raised eyebrow. Then, he grinned. “I remind you being all smiles, the morning after.”
“... True.” She smiled. Seemed like Naruto always knew the right thing to say. Except for that time. “... So, you're leaving?”
“Well, I'll stick around a few more days. But after that... I mean, mystery girl or not, there's no ghost. So, yeah. I'm going back home.” Naruto admitted, leaning his chin on one of his hands, puffing in annoyance.
“I guess that was inevitable.” 'Should I or should I not?' Tsunami had had something on her mind since that morning. Something that, by all means, he had a right to know, but she wasn't sure she should tell him. It was more her responsibility than-“Uhk!” She threw a hand to her mouth, her whole body shooting forward as she heaved and gasped.
“Tsunami-nee-san!” Naruto was immediately in front of her. She was pale in the face, trying to stop herself from throwing up. “Are you okay?!”
“Y-Yeah.” In the end, she managed to rein her lunch in. She breathed deeply, calming her body down. Naruto slowly helped get back into a sitting position. “J-Just a bit of nausea.”
“You should see a doctor. You were sick this morning as well, right?”
“... Yeah.” She couldn't decide. Should she, or should she not tell him?
-Bad End--Spoiled Hazel-Suggestion: You've got to learn patience, padawan
Yep. Bad End, guys. So, what happens now? Well, now you choose where to go back to! I hope you saved the game! No? No matter, I did it for you! The options you have are:
-Go
back to the First Day's Choice-
-Go
back to the Mission Choice-
-Go
back to the Meadow Choice-
-Go
back to the Fangirls Choice-
-Go
back to the Offer's Choice-
So, what are you waiting for? It's an end, but it's not the end! Vote!
Meinos Kaen out!
Loyal Minion here with words of sage wisdom and advice for all of the perverts out there who voted for this choice. I TOLD YOU SO! Strider and I called it bad ending after the hanky panky. Now I'm not saying I'm no pervert far from it but I thought a little with my brain and not my second head. Now I'm going to do my I Told You So Dance. Just imagine the most annoying white boy dance ever. I'm doing that dance. Now that I've addressed that issue lets break this down old school style.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all to my ruler Meinos. You can write a good lemon I'm just saying that now. That PDF file will forever remain on my hard drive and will be the first thing I recover in case of a crash. It was both hot and tastefully. Not necessarily something you see in every lemon.
Second the save game file. THANK YOU! I'm glad we get to redo the choice and thank you for a variety of options. Almost all of the votes so far are for redoing the Offer choice. I think that's a mistake. One it brings up the cons I talked about last post plus I don't want to see Tsunami rejected it would break both hers and my heart. I believe the fan-girl choice could be the most interesting one to do because of the new environment Naruto would end up in. The mission could still be completed but we could see an even more branching path for us to follow.
Third and finally is a question about the "items" we seem to have acquired over the novel. I'm beginning to wonder if maybe these items could effect things like bonus scenes, choices that Naruto might make or maybe even to avoid a bad ending. It's only speculation and dammit you do a good job of making my brain hurt.
Well I voted, commented and such. Like a good minion should so I'm going to go read that PDF file a few more times......for science of course. Can't wait for your original work dude.
Signing off,
RagnaTBE
go back to the offer and decline, it can't end like this, the lemon was hot though
ReplyDeleteThanks, I try. :D
DeleteI am doing the 'I Told Ya So' dance as well!
ReplyDeleteBut I do have to say this... as nicely written and tasteful as the lemon is, I think it was all pretty light for a Bad Ending.
Honestly I think a Lame Ending would sound more appropriate. There wasn't anything really BAD about it. No getting caught, no mention about fallout reactions at Konoha or there in Wave.
Just a hint that our Lovely Tsunami might be knocked up, and then the disappearance of Haku!Sister-chan. Which honestly doesn't really even count as a failed Mission, cause it was a ghost hunt and the ghost merely left on its own.
See when I hear BAD ENDING, I immediately think of games like School Days (Look up the term, Nice Boat!), or Shuffle! where Kaede goes bat-shit crazy.
You know, those crazy catastrophic endings where the player ends up totally miserable with a damaged reputation/ego/body/relationships with the other characters/ect...
But anywho getting back to the results of our bad end...
I'm gonna agree with Blood Edge (Ragna) that we should go to our Fangirl option here. Because its kinda pointless to just go back to the last option and choose differently. If there's one thing I've learned from these type of games is; once you dodge a bad end by only a single choice, its easier to wind off catching another later on down the same branch.
Its like driving from Dallas to Hollywood, and some how ending up in New York. You need to backtrack a LOOONG ways to where you took that wrong turn. (I knew I should have taken that left turn at Albuquerque!)
Its not a simple fix as just redoing the last option that brought you the bad end, you need to go back AT LEAST a few more to make a full change of path.
In this case it was the fangirls choice that lead to our hot make out session with the lovely Tsunami, leading us to where we are today.
So we change that and then there's no issue with having to turn down/hurt the lovely wave maiden, and we can then progress on towards some good ole Icy-hot Loving! :P
I'll probably comment more after we get some more comments on here, but I gotta get to working on my taxes now... woe is me!
Audios amigos!
~Strider
Yep, I know it wasn't really a BAD Ending. Since it was the first in the First Part of the story, I decided to go easy with it. There will be time for Yanderes and handsaws later. :D
DeleteTo quote a famous alien, "It's a trap!"
ReplyDeleteNow, time to return to the meadow!
Wish you would enable voting from fanfiction, commenting here is bugged for me, I can't see my texts.
What do you mean your texts?
DeleteI can't see what I typed until I publish it
DeleteYou should have written more, what about the ANBU that stalking Naruto. Naruto's Reaction to being a father, While I can imagine it/remember other fiction's, I would still like to see how you write it out.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the other commenters, sadly I don't see the Votes changing much.
The Lemon's better than most of what people have occasionally written in their fictions.
Will the Ghost of Zabuza Appear and turn Naruto into Cloud Stife?
Worth it. Anyway that wasn't that bad of an ending Naruto isn't the type of person who cares about social norms and plus he'd probably be ecstatic about being a dad. Although let that be a lesson to any impressionable youngsters out there 'Always wrap it up'. I have on question though since we did reach the bad ending and everything resets to the previous choice will Naruto remember what happened?
ReplyDeleteSo yeah, turns out the obvious bad end WAS a bad end, just not in a way that we thought it would be, not sure if that was the orriginal plan frmo you of if you just wanted to surprise us. Either way, I'm fine with going back only 1 option, simply because I just didn't like the section with the fangirls. Probably should have mentioned this back in that thread, but I had expected the excact opposite reaction from Naruto, because from what I know about his personality, he should have been over the moon about having so many people thinking that he's awesome.
ReplyDeleteEither way, I can't help but hope that people are a little bit more cautious now that they've gotten their proof that turns out, you actually can write a lemon :P.
Go figure. That wasn't so bad after all. And I would've mind gamed myself into a bad end had I not voted for safety any way. Bit whose to say that won't happen next TIME!?!?
ReplyDeletei fucking knew it was a bad end!!! god damn it!!! i should have voted last time!!!
ReplyDeleteUgh!! it's bloody annoying when you knew you were right...
anyway thanks for updating this.
p.s. i hope you update your narutoxmarvel cross
I agree, I want to read the next chapter Of "No Limits"....
DeleteThirded!
DeletePersonally I want to try the meadow scene over again
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